WWW & EBI

WWW-
I think the shots were really good and the editing fit the genre of the song. So overall I feel it was a success for the genre. The overlapping shots of Jocelin worked really well. The eye shot looked nice because it was abstract and stood out which worked really well. The shot where Jocelin is in a fuzzy TV edit looks interesting because it is different edit style. I think the location of the stage worked well, specially the cage bit because the cage bars were completely out of focus so the audience were focusing on Jocelin. I think the shots filmed in Jocelin's studio worked really well with the rap bits because it fits with the rap genre being in a studio.


EBI-
I think more shots of a woman presence would have added a better fitting narrative to the video and the song.I also think I could have had a variety of more shots. If I had more time I would of  filmed more shots for example of a woman whose face would not be seen, only her hair or other facial features to create an enigma. I would like to have one more performance of Jocelin possibly performing the song down a street because its urban and that fits the genre. I would have liked to re-edit a bit where the lip synching seems out of synch. I don't think all of it should have been in black & white, I thought it looked a bit pretentious and it lost its appeal after the rough draft.

Updated Presentation

Lay Down Prez

Revisions, decisions and results on editing

Decisions: I decided to edit the performance footage I had to see what i could come up with. I decided to shoot a shot of a girls eye to appear in the video when he mentions her brown eye but the girl I filmed had green eyes so I had to use colour correct to make them brown, this also made it pop out more and look more majestic.

Revisions: I decided that a performance on its own wasn't exciting for a music video so I decided to get a variety of shots instead of just three different angles of the performance. Also I got feedback from some people and they said I needed a woman presence to make the love song make more sense.

Results: I filmed some shots of Jocelin making a song on his computer to add some more shots to editing. I edited a brown eye overlapping a part of Jocelin's performance so this would create more female presence.

Revisions, decisions and results on filming

Decisions: I had decided to film shots of Jocelin performing his song and I would also film clips of a couple having difficulties with their relationship which would link visually to the lyrics.
The stage was already being used for a school play so I got to use the staging which was a happy accident. The play was hairspray but they used a city background which I thought would imply that Jocelin is a simply city boy with a big heart for music.

Revisions: Half way through shooting I decided that the couple narrative wasn't necessary and it would make it harder to represent my artist if there was different people in the video, I did originally want the background to be plain so Jocelin would stand out but they had a play going on so their was different staging.

Results: I got all the shots and used them in the video, the result of the stage change is that the video looked more visually interesting rather than a plain background.

Jocelin Francis - Lay Down

My feedback from one of the aHem executive

Lay Down Rough Cut

Decisions- I have decided not to use some footage of the basic and simplistic love story and change it for something a bit different so what i have come up with is that the artist will be in a public area trying to hand out CDs but no-one wants to know but then one girl takes an interest and it seems like they fall in love.

The video of my Lay Down Presentation

Lay down Presentation

Lay down prez

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